Evaluation of Draft 1

Megan and I completed this together:

After several audience feedback focus groups and various feedback we decided to make changes to our orginial plot and attempt to create an opening which would be easier to follow and still incorpirate our basic initial plot ideas. The main prop and feature of our opening, the tape, will still be the fuel for the action in the opening. We took all feedback and had a 2 hour session in which we evaluated our first draft a final time before decifing which changes would be made to the plot.

We intitially chose which shots we wanted to keep in the opening and decicded which shots did not work and should be removed from the opening. We kept the characters and added one memeber of the cast after returning to our orginal casting line-up to decided which actor we would like to include in our second draft as an extra character in the opening. 

Our plot incorpirates the character of Mirabelle and Larreh more and removes the dialogue from the protaganist Kathleen's role as we felt this would result in a more effective sense of ambiguity. The plot still includes Kathleen returning home before having an unexplained tape appear. The modified plot focuses on the movement of the tape rather than what is on the tape as this allowed us to play around more with shots and character development. 

The tape is about to be listened to in the plot leaving the audience to assume what has happened and what the significance of the tape is rather than knowing what is on the tape. We decided this would be a better route for our story as it is more interesting and will translate better on film rather than becoming a very confsuing sequence. 

We have created a script and storyboard which illustrates our modified plot and will be modifying previous planning posts to ensure they corelate with the new plot.